Sweet Baby Gifts

Me and my friend wrote a song.
Tell me what you think
BE BRUTALLY HONEST.
Also, let me know what style it should be sung in.
Example: Country, classical, hip-hop, rap?
Thanks A lot!

You make me go around when you touch the ground.
I felt so sad when you looked at my dad and he told you to leave.
I could see you weren’t pleased.
But, we had some fun out there in the sun
And I just wanna let you know that

Last night, at your place, on a date.
I thought it was fate.

But then you went through my phone again and again,
I thought down the road we could actually be friends.

CHORUS
You told me lies, so I said good-bye to you.
I’m not your boo.

Last weekend you asked me to lend you my new C-D
But instead, I found out you were just playin me
When your with your boys you treat my like a toy,
Like I’m a cheap plastic doll,
Well I wanna tell you,
You’re not getting another call.

You were sweet to me.
Saying that we would always be in love forever
Now I’m telling you it’s never … gunna happen.

You told the world rumours about me.
Don’t hide underneath your skin
There’s no way out, I win
I know you cheated, and you lied
I know who you are even under your disguise
So just let me be free.
So let me be.

CHORUS
You told me lies, so I had to say good-bye to you.
I needa let you know
You better not come to my show.
And I swear to you.
I’m not your boo.

You gave me gifts and spoiled me like crazy
You can take it all back I don’t wanna hear you call me baby
And telling me that I’m your yellow sweet daisy.
I threw it all out; you can go threw the trash.
The dinners you payed for, just take all the cash.
Go check my text-messages I deleted them all.
You even ditched me for your friends at the mall.
I should’ve seen it before, and kicked you out the door.
Now I’m stuck in this place, just thinking in space.
About how you treated me, and how I couldn’t see.
That you were mean, you were rude,
You didn’t care about me, just like I was a dude.
This wasn’t real, not for me or you.
And I really feel used.

CHORUS
You told me lies, so I had to say good-bye to you.
I needa let you know
That you gotta go
And I swear to you.
I’m not your boo.

Back in the day I thought that some day we were gunna have a future.
You screwed it all up, and now I’m stuck in muck, just tryna find a cure.

CHORUS
You told me lies, so I had to say good-bye to you.
I needa let you know
That you gotta go
And I swear to you.
I’m not your boo.

THANKS GUYS !

uhhhhhhhhhh…..okay..for one its too long. you could shorten it up a bit and make it rhyme a little more…it might be a good idea to take out all the verses that have to do with electronics. thats so annoying. this digital age we live in totally sucks. anyway, its good just needs some tweaking. and with the boo word involved, this song should be r and b, or soft core rap.